Wordiness Post

Wordiness is caused when you pad your writing with empty phrases or when struggling to clarify ideas.
You can eliminate wordiness in your writing if you mark sections of your writing that you struggled to produce. But after you're done with your draft, pass through your paper once, focusing only on eliminating unnecessary language. Pay particular attention to sections you struggled to get out.
Learn what wordiness patterns are typical of your writing. Most people tend to fall into two or three patterns of wordiness when they write. Learn what your patterns are, and edit with those patterns in mind.

ex. (wordy) It is expensive to upgrade computer systems.
(consice) Upgrading computer systems is expensive.

(wordy) Chlorofluorocarbons have been banned from aerosols. This has lessened the ozone layer's depletion.
(concise) Chlorofluorocarbons have been banned from aerosols, lessening the ozone layer's depletion.

Proflie Examples
(wordy) Greg also jokes about a man named Bill that comes everyday that will sit for a while reading the paper.
(concise) Greg also jokes about a man named Bill that comes everyday and reads the paper.

(wordy) The Shell sees many different people that lead very different lives, but for some reason it is a place where they all...
(concise) The Shell sees many different people that lead very different lives but....