Comma Splices & Wordiness by Nat

Comma Splices-

ex. It is almost tweleve o'clock, we can not make it to class on time.

Comma splices are when two independent thoughts come together with commas without a connection between the two words, phrases, or thoughts. There are ways to fix it, but simply removing the comma is not a way to completely fix the problem. You can change the comma to a semicolon.

ex. It is almost tweleve o'clock; we can not make it to class on time.

You can also change the one sentence to two separate sentences.

ex. It is almost tweleve o'clock. We can not make it to class on time.

You can insert a coordinating conjunction (which is a conjunction that joins thoughts together such as "and" "for" "yet" "nor" "but" and "so") which will bring the thughts together.

ex. It is nearly tweleve o'clock, so we can not make it to class.

Those are all aceptable ways to avoid comma splices and ways to fix them.

Wordiness-

Wordiness is simply when the writer puts too many words into describing something and will often times lose the readers attention.

ex. It was unbearably hot outside, but that is what mae the expereince enjoyable and very fun, but would also lead to the wonderful mistake that would be the best mistake I've made since coming to this wonderful school.

There are a lot of unnecessary words and most can be eliminated.

ex. It was hot outside that day, but despite the heat I stayed and would later that afternoon make a mistake.

I was able to eliminate much of the uneeded words and compress it into just what was needed.