1. I knew there would be a good bit or mistakes. I had no time to get someone to proof it. The comments were good I believe they will make my paper much better. I am feeling that my paper will be much better now.

2. I need to remember to:

• Paragraph things correctly
• start off strong
• be careful with my word choices

I need to remeber not to:

• Use comma splice
• Use repetition
• Use comma splices in dialogue. Dialogue flows faster.

3. Dialogue flows faster.

5. My paper should now have no more comma splices. I feel that it is much better then when I first handed it in. I fixed many of the mistakes and edited some other things. In later writings I will know to look out for comma splices and repetitions.