Spencer - 1st Profile Reflection

After handing in the second draft of my profile essay I felt I had actually learned quite a lot about my writing. This was the first time I ever honestly put effort into revising a first draft, and I believe it paid off. I feel that the paper is better, and reads much more cleanly than before, but I still feel that the couple of problem areas aren't perfect. If it can be said that the first draft erred too much on the side of creative overstatement, I worry that this draft might fall to flat.