Reflection

My paper didn't change drastically. I kept the first part concerning the visitor's perspective and experience of the Sundial, only deleting and adding ideas. I broadened my father's perspective and experiences in a way to create a clear contrast between the two points of view. I did include a tragic incident that happened at the Sundial; I just hope it's in its accurate place. I do feel better about my paper now since tension has been created. I improved my paragraphs' organizations and I think that has made the paper more instructive. I hope I can make the A this time. This experience mainly taught me to understand the topic thorougly through discussions with the proffessor and classmates and through readings. As the year proceeds and after my first regrettable disaster, I look forward to enhancing my writing skills more and more.