Amanda's Paper

Well I wish this paper outcome had a been smoother. I am disappointed with the the ways things have started. As for the paper, I shortened my sentences. I also took out many unecessary punctuations that were found in the paper. I am looking forward to my writing style to improve. I need to start doing more proofreading with papers. My sentence structure is better with the final draft, I just wish I had double checked many key factors that I needed for the paper. Everything should get better. The group classes will be a big help.