Conciseness
Making your point in the fewest possible words. Eliminate repeat words.
Example from the book:
Original: Her constant and continual use of vulgar expressions with obscene meanings indicated to her pre-elementary supervisory group that she was rather deficient in terms of her ability to interact manner with peers in her potential interaction group.
Revised: Her constant use of four-letter words told the day-care workers she might have trouble getting along with other four-year olds.
Example from my paper:
Original: Mathew is the oldest O'Brian and he was also the first to marry.
Revised: Mathew is the oldest and the first to marry.
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