Thoughts

I have had PLENTY of time to think on my paper over the past week. It was a relief to turn it in. I've been thinking about how I could switch perspective for a third paper and I'm not sure what to do. I could make the whole story from Susan's perspective looking in on a huge family. I don't know if it would still be a profile paper though. WE'll just have to see what kind of grade I get on the second draft...

Reflection post.

My paper changed in such a way that will make it more enjoyable. I tried to cut out a lot of the repetitiveness and extra detail that bogged down my writing. I think it is a much better paper and i'm anxious to see what i will recieve on it or what comments i might get back. This experience has helped pay attention to how I tend to repeat myself at tiems and add unnecessary details. I think overall, it has helped me a lot.

reflection

I changed alot in my profile, but I mostly shortened sentences and paragraphs. I believe it is a far more impressive paper than it was before my revisions. I will try to keep my next composition compacted.

Reflection

During the revision I tried to shorten my paragraphs so that I could get to the race quicker and changed all of my verbs to present tense. Also, during the revision I had a parallelism problem that I know how to fix now. I feel that my paper is better, hopefully. I added more names to it and explained things more thoroughly. All in all, I think it is a better profile of the Neshoba County Fair than the first draft was. In the future I'll be able to spot parallelism problems better and I'll be able to keep in the same tense throughout the whole paper easier. I never really was good at staying in the same tense until now, thanks to this paper. Hopefully my future papers will be easier to right and come out better than this one. =)

hyperboles

A hyperbole is a type of language that over exaggerates a comparison of two things. "I almost died laughing" is a very commonly used hyperbole. Many people confuse hyperboles with similes and metaphors because it often compares to things, but hyperboles are not realistic comparisans.
I over used hyperboles in my first draft like when I wrote that the kids got licked to death. I changed the sentence to something like, the kids wanted to pet her and get licked by her long pink tongue.

docucam post

I learned that nobody is going to laugh at you if you try your best. I also learned that peer review is not always a bad thing. I like the fact that the session only had six people because i get nervous in big crowds.

regrouping

I need to remember to

• not put quataions around thoughts
• make sure that I always capitalize the word I
• keep it simple by compressing sentences
• compress paragraphs
• proof read better

I need to remember not to

• use run on sentences
• use too many hyperboles
• go comma crazy
• over think
• rush