What's weird...

Has anyone noticed that we've already exceeded the number of blog posts from the month of October like 18 times in matter of minutes? No paticipation there.

Who we really R

Jordan- Lover boy
Cooper- Party animal
Kim- Bookworm
Sarah- Girlscout
Darrin- I'm always right
Spencer - Old man
Emma- Goodie Goodie
Skyla- "oh my God the world and their eating problems"
Whitney - I'm country, deal with it
Natalie- Fat, ugly and no one loves me
Kylie- The quiet warrior
Trevor- The Dude

Mr. Keleher For PRESIDENT

Who is with me when I say Mr. K is the coolest MF'er in the land. This class was not Lit. This class was BA debate and Lit. Do ya feel me. Mr K RULES!!!!!!!!!!! GO DAWGS!!!!.

Reflections

I thought Spencer would feel better If I wrote one too. I love you guys!! I hope we have a class together next year! (That part was for Jordan) HAGS (Have A Great Spring)...

Uhh...

Does anyone else feel like they're writing in yearbooks? Just wondering.

Participation by Spencer

I feel like, for better or worse, I was an active part in this class. Rarely did i keep my mouth shut about anything, and I enjoyed the lively discussions that we seemed to have during nearly every class. I was absent a couple of days, but did well on the quizzes. But, as far as disruptions or distractions go, I can't really say that I'm a master at keeping my attention from jumping to alternate topics, so I wouldn't be surprised if this part of my participation grade didn't show a small dent.

grade for participation

I think that the grade I deserve for participation is 85%

1. Discussion in Class:
I was not an active participant in the discussions in class, but most of the time I contributed with some sort of input such as an opinion, comment or question.

2. Attendance:
I am almost sure that my attendance for this class was perfect. If I missed it might have been only once but I don't recall missing any classes.

3. Quiz Grades:
My quiz grades were a 90% and a 40%, that would average out to a 65%.

4. Distruptive/ Distracted:
I was only distruptive once and it was something minimal, I don't think the teacher was bothered. If I'm distracted it is only something momentaneous because I tend to be very focused in this class.

Trevors Participation

1) Everyone knows that Darrin and I are not shy about speaking our minds. Because of this we have had many debates over the discussions in class. Most of the time we are like ying and yang but we have agreed on some issues. I do believe that we have attributed more than our share to the class.
2) Due to the fact that I have not missed a day (that's right gang Big Dow has perfect attendence) I believe that I have meet the attendence requirements. I would like to thank my mom for this. She was the one to get my lazzy butt out of bed all of those days. She is a true Dow
3) My quiz average is 97.5 . I hope my grade in the class is that high. I would like to thank my mother for this as well. She also made me study instead of enjoying college life.
4) I have only had a few loud outbursts during heated discussions. I try to keep quiet during reading or learning time. I hope I never distracted anyone from their work but if I did, I am sorry. Please do not appologize to me, I have distracted many people in the past. Do not be ashamed, You are only human

Reflection

I think I can honestly say that I enjoyed this class. That statement can only stand by itself because of my previous dislike for all classes in which "literature" or "composition" was inclulded somewhere in the course title. I feel like not only did I learn about my writing, but I learned about different the different styles of persuasion, and how to recognize them.

PARTICIPATION GRADE

I believe that I deserve a 98 for my participation grade. It would be a 99.9, but I did miss a few classes. I have voiced my opinion on all issues discussed in this class even if nobody else agreed with my belief. I was willing to help people if they needed my help and I put effort into my work.

Emma's Participation

I think that i participated quite a good bit in this class. I feel like i added to the discussions and expressed what i thought or asked questions during them to verify things. I feel like i really tried to take part during the discussions. While sometimes i was a little quiet because i wasnt really sure what i wanted to say, other times i said what was on my mind.

I also attended every single class. I never even skipped one single class. I made a point to be early or at least on time and i always waited until class was dismissed to leave. ((Except for today, i have to leave 15 min. early because i have to go to work)).

I also completed all of the quizzes and im almost positive i did well on all of them except for maybe, possibly one quiz.

I really wasnt disruptive during class. I mean sure i may have said a few words to someone sitting next to me, but i mean no one is perfect and everyone talks during class at some point in time. The only exception to this is that one time i was doodling on a sheet of paper and i wrote a few sentences to Alllie and mr. keleher asked me not to do that anymore, and after that i really really tried to be on my best behavior during this class. I feel like after that incident i really did do better.

Overall i feel like i should get a low to mid A in this class for the participation part.

Participation & Me!

Grade: A+
Why:
I believe I deserve this high participation score because of my obvious interest in our discussions. I always participate in class and enjoy debating controversial ideas. I feel I am someone that is heard every class period. On top of that I have been to EVERY class. I may have been tardy once or twice, but it was not on purpose! Regarding quiz grades, I scored accordingly with the work I did. I believe there was one quiz I absolutely BOMBED because I legitimately forgot to do the reading assignment. Overall I did fairly well on quiz grades. Now on the topic of being disruptive or distracted in class...I plead guilty! Only because I truly enjoy spending time with this learning community! I blame any deductions from my participation grade on Kim! I had to read a note she passed me!! : )

Darrin's participation

I believe that at the beginning of the semester (the first 2-3 days) i was not properly participating in class. I was not used to the setup of a colledge course but i quickly caught on. I believe that after a ruff start i began to flow well with this class. I speak in the discussions and am often one of the only ones. I did have a few absences but nothing that would take away from my learning experience. My quiz grades were all very good (maybe one bad one in there). I might have been a little disruptive but i believe i contributed much more than I took away. This class has been very enjoyable and I believe i have put forward A-B work.

My Participation Grade

Normally, in all of ENGL 1101 classes, I was quiet during class. I hardly participated in discussions. That's because I'm more of a science person and don't have a huge interest for language arts subjects. However, I did speak and articulate whenever I was told to. I definitely attended all classes and never missed a single one. During class, I was an attentive listener and never disrupted lectures or held chit-chats with colleagues. My quiz grades were satisfactory, one high, one low, so eventually they averaged to a satisfactory average. I did turn in all my work on time, took the opportunity of repeating drafts, and posted blogs whenever required. According to this self-description, I honestly believe I deserve a 16 or 17 out of 20.

My Participation...

Alright, so when it comes to participation in this class, I think I'm in the middle of the class. I don't speak out loud much, that's just not me. Throughout the sememester I have tried to participate in many of the discussions we've had as I could. Sometimes I didn't have anything to say though. I missed class 2 times, due to laziness probably, I really can't remember. My quiz grades are looking pretty nice. I NEVER was disruptive or distracted. Overall, I liked this class, and I think I deserve an A or a high B for my participation grade. The End. :)

Participation

I think that my participation grade should be an A. I call out answers to questions in class and participate in discussions if I feel like I have something important to say. I have come to every class that was required of me. I complete the reading assignments and my quiz grades reflect that; I usually get all the answers correct. I think I missed one on the Antigone quiz. I'm not disruptive or talkative during class, but the people that ARE chatty really distract me. When people are talking to each other during class, I have trouble concentrating or reading things. I've been on the computer on a webpage when we weren't supposed to be surfing, and once, instead of talking, I wrote a note to Sarah.

Ayshia's Participation In Class

I think that my participation grade should be an A or B because my discussion was not that well and my quiz grades were not to well either.

I did not participate in many discussions but my presence was always known in every class that I attended. Although my opinions about the discussions were not voiced, they were thought about carefully in my head and outside of class. The reason that I did not participate in the discussions was because I am a pretty shy person and I don't normally engage in conversation with people I don't normally converse with. I am not a very vocal person in school.

I attended class pretty regularly. I only think that I missed 2 days and one of those day was because I was at the health clinic. I had an excuse but I didn't turn it in because I left it at home.

My quiz grades were not that good.

I don't think that I was very disruptive in class because I was not a very talkative person. I may have made a couple of comments to my peers around me but other than that I was reasonable quite.

Participation Grade

When we went around the room and where asked to contribute to disscussion I had something to say. I have missed a couple of classes and had a doctors note one time when I was ill. All my quiz grades where passing. I do not think I was ever disruptive/distracted in class except for maybe one time. I think I should probably get an A or B for participation.

The discussions in class were good...everyone had their own view and arguement to bring to the table. Of course there were many clashing views, and different opinions, but it made the discussions more lively and fun to interact in. As far as my personal discussions in class...I was involved but not as much as others in the class. I did not sit without a voice...but I did not speak up much. I would like to have participated more in the discussions.

I believe my attendance was good, I may have missed one or two class I believe, I was sick for a week. I had no excuse note because it was just a common stomach flu. But, other than that time, I have been at every class.

My quiz grades were decent, but I can not remember all of them, I can not even remember how many we took, I know I missed one because I was out sick.

I may have talked out of turn or over Professor Keleher a time or two, but I have done nothing severely distracting and disruptive to the class. I have always paid attention, never been on the computer doing multiple things, or doing what I was not suppose to. Done the assigments assigned in class promtly and on time.

I believe the grade I deserve for this class would be a mid B grade. I have done alot of participation, and been firly promt in doing assignments in class, and participating in class. But I have been out twice, and missed a quiz. I also did not speak very much in class.

Wow!

I really had no idea we've posted this much. I guess I haven't look at this blog in forever though...it took me a while to remember my password. This looks good though.

A reflection of my participation in class.

Throughout this semester I feel that I have learned a lot about the writing process and about my own writing skills as well. From the first essay to the last essay ( the argument paper ) I feel that I have improved greatly. I feel that during in class discussions I am polite and cooperate by giving my input on discussion topics. There may have been a few times where I have spoken out of turn, but I am sure it was not on purpose, but out of eagerness to speak out about the topic. I cannnot recall many days where I was late or decided not to make it to class. One occassion was a Jewish holiday I believe and the other was a day that I got to class and told Mr.Keleher that I had not been feeling well. When it came to the quizzes and blogs, I do not feel I gave 100%, however, I do feel they were very beneficial to this class.

After reflecting on this semester, I feel that I deserve a B for participation. I feel this way because I did not give 100%, but I do not feel as if I chose to do nothing, I really enjoyed this class and cared about how I was going to do.

A reflection of my participation in class.

Throughout this semester I feel that I have learned a lot about the writing process and about my own writing skills as well. From the first essay to the last essay ( the argument paper ) I feel that I have improved greatly. I feel that during in class discussions I am polite and cooperate by giving my input on discussion topics. There may have been a few times where I have spoken out of turn, but I am sure it was not on purpose, but out of eagerness to speak out about the topic. I cannnot recall many days where I was late or decided not to make it to class. One occassion was a Jewish holiday I believe and the other was a day that I got to class and told Mr.Keleher that I had not been feeling well. When it came to the quizzes and blogs, I do not feel I gave 100%, however, I do feel they were very beneficial to this class.

After reflecting on this semester, I feel that I deserve a B for participation. I feel this way because I did not give 100%, but I do not feel as if I chose to do nothing, I really enjoyed this class and cared about how I was going to do.

Argument essay

In the newest paper, the argument essay, I reorganized the paragraphs and fixed some puntual and grammatical errors. I ended up placing a a real-life paragraph from my essay as my introductory paragraph for more emphasis and feeling about my topic. Sometimes, reading over the paper multiple times can help you to re-think the organization, because some paragraphs may have stronger points than others and different points altogether, so you must make sure they are placed properly. If the paper flows steadily, along with a strong argument, the reader will most likely want to read it.

whys

My sentence about people feeling terrible about the overpopulation of dogs was changed because it was too lengthy and wordy.

My tragedy sentence was shortened because it was a lengthy hyperbole. It may not be an actual tragedy!

plan for draft two

I have decided that I do need to have specific numbers of overpopulations for my paper. I plan on finding statistics and adding them. I will also correct my grammar mistakes.

KNEE JERK

I expected to better than what I did. I spent alot of time on this paper, but not enough evidentally.

Argument Essay Blog

Knee Jerk Response

After I looked at my corrected essay, I felt surprised. I wasn't expecting the grade I got since the students who corrected my paper before gave me really low grades. However, the changes I made after that might have influenced in the improvement of my grade. I feel that my argument is well supported and that I have improved since I made less passive voice mistakes, and run on sentences mistakes.

Plan for 2nd Draft

My plan for the second draft is to correct my MLA errors. As well, I will look over my paper and get rid of the wordiness without changing the actual content.

WHY's

Dr. Keleher sugested me not to include the example of the pharmacist who refused to sell birth control pills to a woman in Winsconsin. I think this is because even though the example is relevant to the topic of the paper, the focus of my paper since to be the African situation and to include an example from Winsconsin may seem out of place and even unnecessary.

Argument paper blog

Knee Jerk Response

My first response was that I expected several minor errors. I wasn't that surprised, I'm pretty happy about the grade I received.

Plan for 2nd draft

• fix all errors pointed out to me on the paper
• use more of a variety of words to begin sentences
• make it sound less listy
• add my own commentary to the paper maybe with personal examples
• combine several of my citations together
• change in paper citations to only 2-3 words
  

The "Why's"

• Imagine legalizing marijuana and in the next five years the usage will quadruple. This would lead to higher drop out rates at school, higher unemployment, and health care would be burdened by many more people, which would then lead to increased cost of healthcare benefits to the unemployed which would come out of our taxes.
• If we legalized marijuana, in the next five years, the usage might quadruple. This would lead to higher drop out rates at school, higher unemployment and health care costs.

You asked 'why the change?' because I already said the last sentence in the beginning of my paper, so readers already know that.

Knee-Jerk Reaction and Plan for Draft Two

Knee-Jerk
My response to my grade and comments where overall expected. I thought I had a good idea and organized the paper well but knew that there were things I could add more to, but did not really know what exactly to write. The idea to add more specific organizations seems to be what I was missing. Also, you pointed out that my factual paragraph was listy, and I will brainstorm on how to make it flow better.

Plan for Draft Two
My first paragraph I will only revise one sentence becuase the comment "good start" was written- and that was surprising because I struggle with strong introductions. The second paragraph can be fixed by taking out some words to make it less wordy and to clean up the meaning by rereading it and making more sense about what I am trying to convey. The thrid was a "good point"-so I'll leave that one alone. Forth needs a better word for obsession. Fith was the factual, listy paragraph. Need to add transitions. Sixth needs to be more specific about when the Bush Administration requested more funding for military use. Also, I'll take out a comma I threw in. Inflated is also a better word for unnessary, and budget better than bill. Again, in the last paragraph, abroad is better than foreign- add in a "would" and a "more" to make more sense of last sentence.

Passive/Active Voice

I looked for some things to change and I couldn't really find anything. I hope that is okay. I guess we will see when my paper is graded. Haha

-Emma Pickle-

Passive/Active Voice

I think I fixed some passive voice and made them more active...

Before:
Imagine what the United States government could do for the people with the money that they spend on weapons.

After:
Imagine what the United States government can do for the people with money spent on weapons.

Before:
A long needed national health plan could be introduced.

After:
A long needed national health plan can be introduced.

Before:
...people in the country could benefit from the u.s.

After:
...people in the country benefit from the u.s.

Passive and Active Voice

Before:
These are words heard by many child slaves in America today.

After:
Many child slaves hear these words in America today.

Ok so i attempted to fix my passive sentences and make them active so here are the corrected ones :

Original: In our society today, gay marriage is considered an abomination; a sin against God, but for a gay couple to adopt a child would be down right insane.
Corrected: In our society, gay marriage is an abomination; a sin against God, but for a gay couple to adopt a child is down right insane.

Original: Many parents this day and age have become lazy in the aspects of raising their offspring.
Corrected: Many parents this day and age are lazy in the aspects of raising their offspring.

Original: Adding on to the lack of manners and social conduct is the fact that these kids have been taught what is “supposedly” socially wrong and volatile; including the act of being homosexual.
Corrected: Adding on to the lack of manners and social conduct is the fact that these kids are taught what is “supposedly” socially wrong and volatile; including the act of being homosexual.

Original: Studies have shown that most of the children raised by gay parents have been healthier and happier in both everyday and home life.
Corrected: Studies show that most of the children raised by gay parents have been healthier and happier in both everyday and home life.

Original: These children are heterosexuals and have not been affected by their parent situation.
Corrected: These children are heterosexuals having not been affected by their parent situation.

Hope i did it right thanks!

Passive/Active

I could only find one!!
BEFORE
As strict as this may sound, it would be a good solution to the fatality rate for teen drivers.
AFTER
As strict as this may sound, it is a good solution to the fatality rate for teen drivers.

passive voice

before

Contraception is known for preventing pregnancies as well as sexually transmitted diseases. In spite of this, the Catholic population is warned against the use of contraception, even between married couples, since it is said to interfere with the plans God has chosen for the future.

after

Contraception prevents pregnancies as well as sexually transmitted diseases. In spite of this, the Catholic population warns against the use of contraception, even between married couples, since it interferes with the plans God has for the future.

before

Nevertheless, the Catholic Church seems to ignore the frightening reality of AIDS and how it is spread, which is mainly through unprotected sex.

after

Nevertheless, the Catholic Church seems to ignore the frightening reality of AIDS and how it is spread, mainly through unprotected sex.