Tuesday, August 28, 2007

Katelyn's Profile Essay

"AND THEY'RE OFF! Coming out of the gate, Legend of Zelda takes a two stride lead over Abdullah. Coming around on the outside is Queen of Spades making a push for the lead."

As the race begins, people drop what they're doing and flock around the race track to watch the race. Some bring their lawn chairs to sit around the fence; others stand and watch, and even more watch from the porches of their cabins. Many families own their own cabin on the fair grounds where they stay the whole week and gather with relatives. My family is watching the races from my Uncle Donny's two story cabin, where most of my family goes to watch the races because it has an outstanding view. My family owns another cabin right behind theirs, but all anyone can see from it is an immense ditch and cabins across.

In this diminutive County of Mississippi, this fair is the largest event ever. All year round, there's never really anything to do. You have to drive two hours to get to a mall. The only place that's really there is a small theater they just recently built. Otherwise, the only place to go is to a park, to Wal-Mart, or to a grocery store. The biggest event besides the fair is deer hunting. They make a huge party out of deer hunting. The men always wake up at three in the morning with their camouflage on and guns in their hands. After a long day of hunting they gather their deer and go to a friend's house, where they skin the deer and then drink and frolic. They never are expected to return home until the next day.

3 comments:

skyla111288 said...

Ketelyn, I thought your paper had a lot of enthusiasm and feeling, which all reader do appreciate. Personally, I did like the fact that it was a small town and ur writing about the biggest even and how ur family enjoys it. Good job.

skyla111288 said...

paragraph 2, line 4, when u say they just recently built, in reference to the theater, u may want to say that has recently been built, or something similar.

cooper j said...

I enjoy how you have good descriptions of the surroundings. I also really like the start, it really helps catch the readers attention. You might mention what county it is in Mississippi.