In and around the city of Atlanta , Georgia , places to eat, sleep, shop, and whatever else anyone can possibly need are plenty. Places where regulars are greeted by name, welcome to stay a while, or even just see a friendly smile are not as common. Luckily, a Shell gas station on the corner of Johnson’s Ferry and Lassiter road loves their regulars, but the owner, Greg, will give anyone who comes in a good laugh.
What really gives the Shell character is the people that are always there. On almost any given morning around six A.M., a guy named Scott will be there with his Brittany Spaniel that will look as though it is about to die if someone walking in does not at least pat her on the head. Karen, a regular, calls the dog by name and gives her a greatly anticipated scratch behind the ears. When commenting on the station, she says, "This is a place where you go and you know what to expect. I have come here for fifteen years and not for the gas, I will be here no matter what the price. Where else will the owner let you keep your own carton of half and half in the fridge?"
2 comments:
plenty needs to be plentiful in the first paragraph. The sentence in the second paragragh about the woman not coming for gas needs to be linked by a colon with the price sentence. I loved the way that you described places of normality and then switched gears to the shell. shorten your comma linked phrases in paragraph one. Paragraph two is perfect despite the colon.Keep up the good work chica.
- Verb tenses errors in the second sentence (are greeted / welcome / see)
- noun-pronoun agreement in the third sentence (station --> their)
- incorrect usage of conjunction "but" since both sentences agree in the third sentence
- very strong dialogue at the end
- good, detailed descriptions throughout your essay
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